University Of Michigan Essay Forum

Essay #1 (Required for all applicants.)

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.

Essay #2 (Required for all applicants.) FRESHMEN APPLICANTS

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests?

Essay #2 (Required for all applicants.) TRANSFER APPLICANTS

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests?

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)

Please read this and post a comment ASAP, I need to send this in by tomorrow!

University of Michigan is definitely one of the most prestigious universities which is portrayed by being ranked 15th on the world. I am applying to the college of Literature, Science and Arts and I hope to major in Psychology as preparation for the Medicine Graduate School.

The College of Literature, Science and Arts definitely has several unique qualities that I am attracted to. First of all, I love how this college provides an extremely wide variety of majors and minors including Asian languages and cultures, political science and psychology. Not only are there a wide range of majors but they are also very unique and rare that many other Universities do not offer them. I believe that by offering such a wide range of majors, which in turn means a wide range of courses, this allows the students to expand their knowledge beyond their field of study. This will allow me to graduate better-rounded which I believe is important for success in the future.

One of my interests is how people behave and how environment and attitude affects one's life drastically. I am aware that the Psychology department in University of Michigan provides a wide range of courses including Psychological Perspectives on Culture and Ethnicity, Psychology and Spiritual Development and Developmental Disturbances of Childhood. This department obviously does not fail to interest the students to a level deeper than just the basic level of psychology. I believe that these courses that are provided will allow me to understand in depth my own behavior and body as well as understand the people around me. As I also hope to become a doctor later on, I only think that by majoring Psychology I will be able to have a better understanding of my patients and be able to approach them in a correct manner to help them heal.

University of Michigan Ann Arbor allows the transition between high school and college to run smoothly by creating smaller communities such as the Health Sciences Scholars Program. Not only does this program unite students who have the same interests but it also allows these students to begin their pre-health journey and understand the world of medicine at an earlier stage. This program offers a health-oriented, diverse, and an interesting learning community and I believe that this program is ideal for me as I am interested in pursuing a career in medicine. As I come from quite a small school which means a very small community, the idea of a program that creates a smaller community in such a large student-town is very appealing.

Overall, the college of Literature, Science and Arts has several qualities that are very captivating including but are not limited to programs which ease the transmission into university, a diverse community and an intellectual society in which I can be introduced to the world of medicine. What the University of Michigan and specifically the college of Literature, Science and Arts provides is definitely what I have always wanted in a university!

Please edit any grammer mistakes and comment on whether this essay answers the question properly. I'm also not completely sure about the conclusion.

Thank you!

The College of Literature, Science and Arts definitely has several unique qualities that attracts me . First of all, I love I think it is weird...maybe you can change to: the variety of majors and minors in the college,including Asian languages and cultures, political science and psychologyI think these words are unnecessary . Not only are there a wide range of majors but they are also very unique and rare that many other Universities do not offer them.You have said that they offered a variety of majors and I think you can make the sentence more concise. I believe that by offering such a wide range of majors, , this is wordy I thinkthe college of LSA allows the students to expand their knowledge beyond their fields of study. This will allow me to graduate better-rounded which I believe is important for success in the future.

In my opinion, you need to use some transition words between the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs.
Also, maybe you use too many "a wide range of"...

Good luck! :)

EDITED:
The College of Literature, Science and Arts definitely has several unique qualities that attract me. First of all, I love the wide variety of majors and minors in the college, including History, political science, philosophy and psychology. Not only are there a wide range of majors but they are also very unique and rare that many other Universities do not offer them. I believe that by offering such a wide range of majors this allows the students to expand their knowledge beyond their fields of study. This will allow me to graduate better-rounded which I believe will make me more successful in the future, especially as a psychiatrist.

One of my interests is how people behave and how environment and attitude affects one's life drastically. I am aware that the Psychology department in University of Michigan provides a wide range of courses including Psychological Perspectives on Culture and Ethnicity, Psychology and Spiritual Development and Developmental Disturbances of Childhood. This department obviously does not fail to interest the students to a level deeper than just the basic level of psychology. I believe that these courses that are provided will allow me to understand in depth my own behavior and body as well as understand the people around me. As I also hope to become a doctor later on, I only think that by majoring Psychology I will be able to have a better understanding of my patients and be able to approach them in a correct manner to help them heal.

Thank you wwd!
Is the rest fine?

including History, political science, philosophy and psychology


This part is confusing. I don't know why you choose these subjects instend of Math, Physics, French or blablabla...and I think maybe you should delete these.

The College of Literature, Science and Arts definitely has several unique qualities that attracts me.

I think maybe you use too many "allows". Try "enables" or something else...
Also, too many "not only...but also..."
You are not a native speaker, are you? I suggest you go to a native speaker or your English teacher to polish your language because I am an international student, too!

Good luck with your application!

btw, would you mind commenting on my personal essay for common app? Thank you!

hey :) i like your essay! However, you need to be slightly more specific. It's good that you've listed some classes offered in UMich, but when I applied to UMich early, i've named some professors and the specific codes of classes (to be honest, i only mentioned one or two). I guess such prompt is asking us to be as specific to UMich as possible. If you can replace UMich with other institutions in your essay, and if their names fit pretty well, I guess you are not being specific enough :P

wwd: cause those are the subjects im interested in... physics maths and whatever is way too basic... my english teacher is fed up of me :P and yeah I'm not native. Thanks a lot though! I'll edit those and change them around a bit..

hahoonh: thank you! I guess I could try being a bit more specific then :P



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